Heat searing into my skin
Rising up in sighing steamy vapour
On the searing blue berth I lie immobile
Dreaming dark grey clouds cool drafts and all pervading wetness.
Dimming sights ,a swirling dust storm
Craning my neck outside
Tonguing the first few drops
Of imminent thunderstorm
Smelling newly drenched earth
Rain french kissing the sand
Nude children uninhibited soaked in laughter
Men cowering under the shade of the banyans.
Bespectacled black blushing with exertion
Stumbling into my solitary coup
A pause, a break in my journey
Across me she sits , to stand again
The blackness drops, hanging on a hook
Brown pastures tumbling in and out
Behind the blinkers staying firmly put
I glimpse the glittering kaleidoscope.
(Penned in a rare moment of poetic inspiration on my last rail journey. The rains and the lass came as we neared the city of the Taj. My first poem in the public domain after an attempt when I was 13, in the school magazine. Ah, to speak of wasted genius ! *Sigh*)
Something in the descriptions in this post reminded me of this post: Three places.
ReplyDeletea very good one! u should write more poetry!
ReplyDeleteI didnt quite understand the last paragraph , but most of us can relate to the poem . This one's pretty good , not like the boring ones you find in your 8th grade english text book . :) good one :)
ReplyDeleteYou should pen poetry more often. Shorter than your descriptions, but the message comes across just as loud and clear. You know, this might sound juvenile and teenager-ish but my favorite line was rain french-kissing the sand. Because I was picturing it in my mind, and went like "Hey, that's a very good line!" I never thought of it that way.
ReplyDeleteGenius indeed. I didn't get most of it. And that's always a sign that I'm reading someone great ;)
ReplyDeleteI liked the french kissing line too.
Back in college, I felt pretty much the same way when I read Blake and Coleridge and all their friends. And to think I did literature!
Very nice Pan, I didn't know you were multi talented :)- as I read through the poem it took me through what you experienced- lovely!
ReplyDeletei like it.....!
ReplyDeletewould love to read some more ...!
Beautiful!!
ReplyDeleteHey visitor, the post you mentioned is indeed beautiful. thanks for visiting !
ReplyDeleteYuvika, i should but fortunately or unfortunately for the world, my inspirational glands seldom work ! ;)
ReplyDeleteAbhishek, breaking convention and letting you peak inside the soul of a poet! the girl was wearing a black burka which she took off after sometime and hung on a hook inside the train ! i found this very alluring and seductive ! let the mystery of the last 3 lines remain ;)
ReplyDeleteJeeves, lol , that line just made it in the final cut. i really thought its a very amateurish line but decided to keep it in the end !
ReplyDeleteAh Judy what would i do without you? Thanks for the honest comment that you didnt get most of it. I just read it again and i agree with you! ;) gosh what is it with you people and french kissing :P
ReplyDelete20/20 thanks for the unconditional praise*puffed up*
ReplyDeleteSepo, thank you !*more puffed up*
ReplyDeleteariyathe, ttthanks *close to bursting point * ;)
ReplyDeletehey -where are you these days?...no news.
ReplyDeletenice! Great imagery.
ReplyDeleteAh, now I get the last paragraph..
ReplyDeleteYour artistry is amazing,it was easy to visualize every line.
i would love to read more !
i like it *this* much!!! :) <3
ReplyDeletecool poem! you have to read my poems sometime..they're random..quite literally..
Just read through the poem and the comments as well...And I think I totally got the mysterious "last 3 lines" :D LOL!
ReplyDelete20/20 Im on sickness leave from the world ;)
ReplyDeleteButterflysoblue,maybe i should bring out a book of poems and force everyone who commented here positively to buy atleast 10 copies, for tormenting friends and family ;) hehe *evil high pitch laugh*
ReplyDeleteRaji, im keen on reading your random poems , ill be stalking your blog soon, so beware !
ReplyDeletePavithra, i bow in silent admiration to your eternal patience for having read the poem and the comments. I thought it would be impossible for a human being , let alone a software engineer. ;) You, like me, sure do have a lot of spare time !:D
ReplyDeleteI pick this line from your previous comment "I thought it would be impossible for a human being , let alone a software engineer. ;) "
ReplyDeleteThanks for reminding me that software engineers are not human anymore..I sometimes forget that :P